{"id":185,"date":"2014-02-02T11:43:26","date_gmt":"2014-02-02T09:43:26","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/paulmelian.de\/blog\/?p=185"},"modified":"2022-11-01T10:03:11","modified_gmt":"2022-11-01T08:03:11","slug":"cum-o-traducem-pe-herta-muller","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/paulmelian.de\/blog\/?p=185","title":{"rendered":"Cum o traducem pe Herta M\u00fcller"},"content":{"rendered":"

F\u0103-\u0163i idee, domnule, ce traducere!
\nI.L. Caragiale, D-ale carnavalului<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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T<\/span>ranspunerea operelor Hertei M<\/span>\u00fc<\/span>ller \u00een rom\u00e2ne\u015fte este, dup\u0103 p\u0103rerea mea, ceva cu totul deosebit. \u00cen primul r\u00e2nd, pentru c\u0103 domnia sa, laureat\u0103 a Premiului Nobel, este n\u0103scut\u0103 \u00een Rom\u00e2nia \u015fi scrie adesea despre aceast\u0103 \u0163ar\u0103. Iar \u00een al doile r\u00e2nd, pentru c\u0103 domnia sa este \u00een m\u0103sur\u0103 \u2013 lucru la care cu greu ne putem a\u015ftepta de la un alt autor str\u0103in \u2013 nu numai s\u0103 aprecieze calitatea textului rom\u00e2nesc, dar chiar s\u0103-i sprijine pe traduc\u0103tori.<\/span><\/p>\n

Deoarece citesc \u015fi scriu cu tot at\u00e2ta pl\u0103cere at\u00e2t \u00een rom\u00e2n\u0103, c\u00e2t \u015fi \u00een german\u0103, am fost c\u00e2ndva \u00een mod firesc confruntat cu acest subiect. Preocuparea mea, la \u00eenceput mai mult sporadic\u0103, a fost \u00eenso\u0163it\u0103 mai t\u00e2rziu de un interes cresc\u00e2nd.<\/span><\/p>\n

Citatul din Caragiale m\u0103 tr\u0103deaz\u0103: concluzia la care am ajuns, compar\u00e2nd textul rom\u00e2nesc cu cel original, nu este de loc \u00eembucur\u0103toare. Calitatea traducerii nu face cinste nici traduc\u0103torilor (p\u00e2n\u0103 la ora actual\u0103, c\u0103r\u0163ile Hertei M\u00fcller au fost traduse \u00een rom\u00e2ne\u015fte de Corina Bernic, Nora Iuga \u015fi Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian), \u015fi nici editurii unde au ap\u0103rut c\u0103r\u0163ile. Traducerile rom\u00e2ne\u015fti con\u0163in adesea evidente gre\u015feli de transpunere, care, pe alocuri, denatureaz\u0103 grav sensul originalului. Prin aceasta, imaginile sugerate cititorului sunt deformate, sentimentele trezite – denaturate \u015fi melodia frazei compromis\u0103.<\/span><\/p>\n

Am ales pentru o analiz\u0103 mai atent\u0103 urm\u0103toarele volume: \u201e<\/em><\/span>C\u0103l\u0103torie \u00eentr-un picior\u201d<\/span><\/em> <\/span>(\u201eReisende auf einem Bein\u201d<\/em><\/span>, traducere de Corina Bernic), \u201e\u00cenc\u0103 de pe atunci vulpea era v\u00e2n\u0103torul\u201d<\/em> (\u201eDer Fuchs war damals schon der J\u00e4ger\u201d<\/em>, traducere de Nora Iuga) \u015fi \u201eLeag\u0103nul respira\u0163iei\u201d<\/em> (\u201eAtemschaukel\u201d<\/em>, traducere de Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian), toate ap\u0103rute la editura Humanitas Fiction \u00een 2010.<\/span><\/p>\n

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\u201eC\u0103l\u0103torie \u00eentr-un picior\u201d<\/span><\/em> debuteaz\u0103 cu st\u00e2ngul chiar prin titlul folosit, traducera exact\u0103 a titlului, \u201eReisende auf einem Bein\u201d<\/em>, fiind mai degrab\u0103 \u201eC\u0103l\u0103tori \u00eentr-un picior\u201d<\/em>. Aceast\u0103 modificare, poate datorat\u0103 vreunui redactor al editurii, nu este de loc lipsit\u0103 de importan\u0163\u0103, deoarece cartea nu descrie c\u00e2tu\u015fi de pu\u0163in un episod de c\u0103l\u0103torie.<\/span><\/p>\n

Vom g\u0103si \u00eens\u0103 aici lucruri \u015fi mai grave.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Voi da un exemplu mai lung, care demonstrez\u0103 efectul unei simple erori de transpunere asupra imaginii de ansamblu:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] Die Frau zwischen den Kerzenst\u00e4ndnern las, wenn sie nicht l\u00e4chelte, in einem Buch. Dann kam ein Mann und k\u00fc\u00dfte sie. Sie schaute in das Buch, als er sie k\u00fc\u00dfte. Las diesen Satz, den einen noch, zu Ende. Sie schlo\u00df das Buch. [ ] Der Mann l\u00f6st die Frau ab, dachte Irene, als die Frau das Buch geschlossen hatte. Aber sie ging nicht. Sie griff sich ins Haar. Schaute den Mann an. [ ] Die beiden, dachte Irene, werden bis Weihnachten die Kerzenst\u00e4nder nicht verkaufen. Werden sie in Kisten packen und weiterziehen.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

Tradus adecvat, textul sun\u0103 pe rom\u00e2ne\u015fte:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] Femeia dintre sfe\u015fnice citea, c\u00e2nd nu z\u00e2mbea, o carte. Apoi a venit un b\u0103rbat \u015fi a s\u0103rutat-o. Ea se uita \u00een carte, c\u00e2nd a s\u0103rutat-o. Citi propozi\u0163ia aceea, doar una, p\u00e2n\u0103 la cap\u0103t. \u00cenchise cartea. [ ] B\u0103rbatul o \u00eenlocuie\u015fte pe femeie, g\u00e2ndi Irene, c\u00e2nd femeia \u00eenchise cartea. Dar ea nu plec\u0103. \u00ce\u015fi prinse p\u0103rul cu m\u00e2na. Se uit\u0103 la b\u0103rbat. [ ] Cei doi, g\u00e2ndi Irene, n-o s\u0103 v\u00e2nd\u0103 p\u00e2n\u0103 la Cr\u0103ciun sfe\u015fnicele. O s\u0103 le \u00eempacheteze \u00een l\u0103zi \u015fi o s\u0103 plece mai departe.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

Acum s\u0103 vedem cum arat\u0103 acela\u015fi text \u00een traducerea Corinei Bernic:<\/span><\/p>\n

<\/span>\u201e[ ] C\u00e2nd nu z\u00e2mbea, femeia aflat\u0103 printre sfe\u015fnicele ei, citea dintr-o carte. Apoi a venit un b\u0103rbat \u015fi a s\u0103rutat-o. C\u00e2nd a s\u0103rutat-o, ea tocmai se uita \u00een carte. A mai citit p\u00e2n\u0103 la cap\u0103t propozi\u0163ia, doar pe aceasta, apoi urm\u0103toarea, p\u00e2n\u0103 la cap\u0103t. Apoi a \u00eenchis cartea. [ ] B\u0103rbatul o \u00eenlocuie\u015fte pe femeie, se g\u00e2ndi Irene. Dar femeia nu plec\u0103. \u00ce\u015fi duse m\u00e2na la p\u0103r. \u00cel privi pe b\u0103rbat. [ ] P\u00e2n\u0103 la Cr\u0103ciun, se g\u00e2ndi Irene, cei doi nu vor reu\u015fi s\u0103 v\u00e2nd\u0103 sfe\u015fnicele. Le vor \u00eempacheta \u00een l\u0103zi \u015fi vor pleca mai departe.\u201d (p. 39)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

Pe l\u00e2ng\u0103 eroarea evident\u0103 \u00een privin\u0163a num\u0103rului de propozi\u0163ii citite, care las\u0103 cititorul cu totul nedumerit \u015fi afecteaz\u0103 imaginea femeii, textul folose\u015fte cuvinte de umplutur\u0103, care nu numai c\u0103 interpreteaz\u0103 \u00een mod nedorit originalul, r\u0103pindu-i ambiguitatea voit\u0103, dar nici nu-i respect\u0103 ritmul abrupt.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Un alt exemplu \u00een care traducerea v\u0103dit eronat\u0103 deformeaz\u0103 complet imaginea sugerat\u0103 de text este<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eKnotige B\u00e4ume <\/span><\/em>trieben \u00c4ste auf dem Boden unten, um den Stamm. Oben d\u00fcrr, unten dicht belaubt.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00cen rom\u00e2ne\u015fte, \u00een\u0163elesul corect este:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eCopaci noduro\u015fi l\u0103st\u0103reau jos la p\u0103m\u00e2nt, \u00een jurul trunchiului. <\/span><\/em>Sus sfriji\u0163i, jos des \u00eenfrunzi\u0163i.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00cen traducerea Corinei Bernic, imaginea rezultat\u0103 implic\u0103 – \u0163in\u00e2nd seama de geotropismul cu prec\u0103dere positiv al crengilor de copac – o monstruozitate (sau chiar imposibilitate) botanic\u0103:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eCopaci noduro\u015fi \u00ee\u015fi l\u0103sau crengile la p\u0103m\u00e2nt, \u00eencol\u0103cindu-le \u00een jurul trunchiului. <\/span><\/em>Sus usca\u0163i, iar jos plini de frunze.\u201d (p. 31). <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00cen afar\u0103 de aceasta, \u201ed\u00fcrr\u201d<\/em> nu \u00eenseamn\u0103 numai \u201euscat\u201d<\/em> (\u201everdorrt\u201d<\/em>), ci \u015fi \u201eusc\u0103\u0163iv\u201d<\/em>, \u201ecosteliv\u201d<\/em> (la oameni \u015fi animale), \u015fi deasemenea \u201esfrijit\u201d<\/em>. Nu vorbe\u015fte nimic \u00een favoarea copacilor \u201eusca\u0163i\u201d,<\/em> \u00een Germania cea iubitoare de ordine ar fi fost de mult t\u0103ia\u0163i… De remarcat \u015fi cuv\u00e2ntul de umplutur\u0103 \u201eiar\u201d<\/em>.<\/span><\/p>\n

Aici merit\u0103, \u00een mod exemplar, s\u0103 retraducem:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eKnotige B\u00e4ume lie\u00dfen ihre \u00c4ste gen Boden (h\u00e4ngen) und schlangen sie um den Stamm. Oben verdorrt, und unten voller Laub.\u201d <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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La fel de clare sunt lucrurile \u015fi \u00een urm\u0103torul caz.<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eIn den K\u00fcssen war eine Klemme.<\/span><\/em> \u201d<\/span><\/span><\/em><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00eenseamn\u0103 pe rom\u00e2ne\u015fte:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00cen s\u0103ruturi era o st\u00e2njeneal\u0103 (o ap\u0103sare, o tensiune, un impas, etc.).<\/span><\/em> \u201d<\/span><\/span><\/em>,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u015fi \u00een niciun caz<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e<\/span><\/em>\u00cen s\u0103ruturi era ceva penibil\u201d (p. 34).<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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\u00cen traducerea Corinei Bernic, acest gen de sc\u0103p\u0103ri nu sunt, din p\u0103cate, rare. Vom mai g\u0103si:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eFingern\u00e4gel\u201d<\/span><\/em> (corect: unghii) = \u201eunghiile degetelor\u201d<\/em> (p. 9), \u201eMusiker\u201d<\/em> (corect hier: muzican\u0163i) = \u201emuzicieni\u201d<\/em> (p. 11), \u201ekrumm\u201d<\/em> (corect: str\u00e2mb) = \u201e\u00eentortocheat\u201d<\/em> (p. 12), \u201everwinkelt\u201d <\/em>(corect: \u00eentortocheat) = \u201ecol\u0163uros\u201d<\/em> (p. 33), \u201eOhrgeh\u00e4nge\u201d<\/em> (corect: cercei) = \u201e\u015etras\u201d<\/em> (p. 38), \u201eauf dem gebl\u00fcmten Bezug der breiten Matraze\u201d<\/em> (corect: pe tapi\u0163eria \u00eenflorat\u0103 a saltelei late) = \u201epe a\u015fternutul \u00eenflorat al saltelei largi\u201d(<\/em>p. 46), \u201eZimmerefeu\u201d<\/em> (corect: ieder\u0103 de camer\u0103) = \u201eRododendron\u201d<\/em> (p. 140), \u201eschamlos\u201d<\/em> (corect: neru\u015finat) = \u201edezinhibat\u201d<\/em> (p. 153), \u201eForelle\u201d<\/em> (corect: p\u0103str\u0103v) = \u201elostri\u0163\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 175) \u015famd.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Lucrurile nu stau cu nimic mai bine \u00een \u201e\u00cenc\u0103 de pe atunci vulpea era v\u00e2n\u0103torul\u201d<\/em>, ba chiar dimpotriv\u0103. \u00cen favoarea traduc\u0103toarei Nora Iuga se poate men\u0163iona doar faptul c\u0103 textul acestei c\u0103r\u0163i este \u00een sine destul de dificil, chiar pentru cititorii germani.<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eFl\u00fcche sind kalt. [ ] Sie sind nicht zum Riechen und nicht zum Essen. Nur zum Wirbeln und flachen Hinlegen sind Fl\u00fcche, zum kurzen Toben und langen Stillhalten.<\/span><\/em>\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/em><\/p>\n

Pe rom\u00e2ne\u015fte, sensul ar fi cam a\u015fa:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00cenjur\u0103turile sunt reci. [ ] Nu sunt de mirosit \u015fi nici de m\u00e2ncat. \u00cenjur\u0103turile-s numai de r\u0103bufnit \u015fi z\u0103cut \u00eentins, de-o scurt\u0103 dezl\u0103n\u0163uire \u015fi-un lung r\u0103bdat<\/span><\/em>\u201d<\/span><\/em> <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

Propunerea Norei Iuga:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00cenjur\u0103turile sunt reci. Ele nu-s de mirosit \u015fi nici de m\u00e2ncat. \u00cenjur\u0103turile sunt bune doar s\u0103 st\u00e2rne\u015fti praful \u015fi s\u0103 te culci pe un loc neted, sunt bune doar de un mic scandal \u015fi de un lung r\u0103gaz de lini\u015fte<\/span><\/em>\u201d<\/span><\/em> (p. 8)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

este indiscutabil\u0103.<\/span> <\/span>Verbul substantivat \u201eWirbeln\u201d nu are \u00een acest context absolut nimic de a face cu expresia \u201eStaub aufwirbeln\u201d<\/em> (a r\u0103scoli praful), care \u00een german\u0103, pe l\u00e2ng\u0103 sensul propriu, are \u015fi sensul figurat de \u201ea face senza\u0163ie, a trezi interesul\u201d.<\/em> Pe de alt\u0103 parte, acest sens figurat, singurul care ar putea fi eventual invocat, nu exist\u0103 \u00een rom\u00e2n\u0103.<\/span><\/p>\n

Cu toate c\u0103 epitetul \u201estill\u201d<\/em> poate s\u0103 \u00eensemne, printre multe altele, \u015fi \u201elini\u015ftit\u201d<\/em> (t\u0103cut, f\u0103r\u0103 zgomot), \u015fi \u201enemi\u015fcat\u201d<\/em>, verbul \u201estillhalten\u201d<\/em> are \u00een german\u0103 doar dou\u0103 sensuri: \u201ea sta nemi\u015fcat\u201d<\/em> \u015fi \u201ea r\u0103bda\u201d,<\/em> astfel \u00eenc\u00e2t op\u0163iunea \u201er\u0103gaz de lini\u015fte\u201d<\/em> este complet neavenit\u0103. \u00cen contrast cu aceste interpret\u0103ri arbitrare, constat\u0103m \u00een acest scurt text \u00een acela\u015fi timp \u015fi \u00eencercarea de a transpune literal, ceea ce duce la o formulare greoaie, care nu respect\u0103 c\u00e2tu\u015fi de pu\u0163in caden\u0163a originalului.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Imaginea care apare \u00een ochii cititorului depinde uneori de un singur cuv\u00e2nt.<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e<\/span><\/em>Ganz oben, wo auch die gr\u00fcnen Messer nicht mehr hinreichen, spannt sich ein Faden aus heisser Luft ins Auge hinein. An ihm h\u00e4ngt das Gewicht der Stadt.<\/span><\/em> \u201d<\/span><\/span><\/em><\/em><\/p>\n

Traducerea exact\u0103:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eSus de tot, unde nici cu\u0163itele verzi nu mai ajung, un fir de aer fierbinte se \u00eentinde p\u00e2n\u0103 \u00een ochi. De el at\u00e2rn\u0103 greutatea ora\u015fului.<\/span><\/em> \u201d<\/span><\/span><\/em><\/em><\/p>\n

conduce la o cu totul alt\u0103 imagine dec\u00e2t:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eSus de tot, unde nici cu\u0163itele verzi nu mai ajung, \u00eenl\u0103untrul ochiului se \u00eencordeaz\u0103 un fir de aer fierbinte. De el at\u00e2rn\u0103 greutatea ora\u015fului.<\/span><\/em> \u201d<\/span><\/span><\/em> (p. 9).<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Deformarea imaginii devine pe alocuri grotesc\u0103.<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eIhre Beine sind knochig, sind zum Anprobieren der Bluse f\u00fcr einen einzigen Gang an den Bauch gestellt\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00eenseammn\u0103 de fapt:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201ePicioarele ei sunt ciol\u0103noase, sunt ata\u015fate(puse) la burt\u0103 pentru probatul bluzei \u015fi-un singur(unic) mers\u201d<\/span><\/em>,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

pe c\u00e2nd versiunea Norei Iuga<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201ePicioarele ei sunt ciol\u0103noase, c\u00e2nd \u00ee\u015fi probeaz\u0103 bluza \u00ee\u015fi duce genunchii p\u00e2n\u0103-n dreptul bur\u0163ii, \u00eencerc\u00e2nd parc\u0103 un mers unic\u201d (p. 16)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

trebuie calificat\u0103 ca cel pu\u0163in stranie.<\/span><\/p>\n

Retraducerea clarific\u0103 \u015fi aici lucrurile:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eIhre Beine sind knochig, wenn sie die Bluse anprobiert, bringt sie ihre Knie bis zur H\u00f6he des Bauches, als versuche sie einen einzigartigen Gang\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Cu ocazia textului:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] das Pferd sucht mit den N\u00fcstern die Baumrinde ab\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

al c\u0103rui \u00een\u0163eles corect este<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] calul cerceteaz\u0103(examineaz\u0103) cu n\u0103rile scoar\u0163a copacului\u201d (<\/span><\/em>sau, \u015fi mai simplu: \u201e[ ]<\/em><\/span> <\/span>calul adulmec\u0103 scoar\u0163a copacului\u201d)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

Nora Iuga ne ofer\u0103 \u015fi ea, la r\u00e2ndul ei, o imposibilitate, de data aceasta de natur\u0103 zoologic\u0103: <\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] calul decoje\u015fte cu n\u0103rile scoar\u0163a de pe lemn\u201d (p. 43).<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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O alt\u0103 r\u0103st\u0103lm\u0103cire a textului original confund\u0103 f\u0103pta\u015ful cu victima \u015fi deruteaz\u0103 cititorul. Pasajul<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eEin halbes Jahr geht der rostige Draht durch die H\u00e4nde. Dann wird die Lohnt\u00fcte zu Grigore gebracht, eine Goldkette wird um den Hals geh\u00e4ngt.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

se traduce corect prin:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eO jum\u0103tate de an trece s\u00e2rma ruginit\u0103 prin m\u00e2ini. Apoi salariul este dus la Grigore, un lan\u0163 de aur este at\u00e2rnat de g\u00e2t.\u201d<\/span><\/em>,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00een timp ce interpretarea Norei Iuga:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eS\u00e2rma cu reflexe ar\u0103mii \u00eei trece vreme de o jum\u0103tate de an prin m\u00e2ini. \u015ei pe urm\u0103 Grigore \u00ee\u015fi prime\u015fte r\u0103splata. I se at\u00e2rn\u0103 un lan\u0163 de aur la g\u00e2t.\u201d (p. 74),<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

contravine, \u00een contextul dat, celei mai elementare logici.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Logica sufer\u0103 \u015fi \u00een urm\u0103torul caz. Propozitia<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eSie l\u00e4\u00dft drei L\u00f6ffel Kaffee ins Wasser fallen, sie macht den L\u00f6ffel nicht na\u00df\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00eenseamn\u0103 pe rom\u00e2ne\u015fte:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eLas\u0103 s\u0103 cad\u0103 trei linguri(\u0163e) de cafea \u00een ap\u0103, nu ud\u0103 lingur(i\u0163)a\u201d<\/span><\/em>,<\/span><\/p>\n

\u015fi \u00een nici un caz<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eDe\u015fart\u0103 \u00een\u0103untru trei linguri\u0163e de cafea f\u0103r\u0103 s\u0103 le ude\u201d (p. 130)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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\u00cen \u201e\u00cenc\u0103 de pe atunci vulpea era v\u00e2n\u0103torul\u201d<\/em>, exemplele de traducere eronat\u0103 a unor simple cuvinte sau expresii sunt extrem de numeroase \u015fi nu se pot \u00eentotdeauna explica prin dificultatea textului. Chiar dac\u0103 ele nu afecteaz\u0103 \u00een toate cazurile la fel de grav sensul general al textului rom\u00e2nesc ca \u015fi cele descrise mai sus, neglijen\u0163a \u015fi superficialitatea traducerii, lipsa sa de respect, at\u00e2t fa\u0163\u0103 de autor, c\u00e2t \u015fi fa\u0163\u0103 de cititor, sunt dup\u0103 p\u0103rerea mea nepermise.<\/span><\/p>\n

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\u201eR\u00fcbenbl\u00e4tter\u201d<\/span><\/em> (corect: frunze de sfecl\u0103) = \u201eFrunze de zarzavat\u201d<\/em> (p. 11), \u201eMuster\u201d<\/em> (corect: model) = \u201eimprimeu\u201d<\/em> (p. 11), \u201efeucht\u201d<\/em> (corect: umed) = \u201eud\u201d<\/em> (p. 12), \u201el\u00f6tete\u201d<\/em> (corect: lipi) = \u201esuda\u201d<\/em> (p. 13), \u201ekrochen\u201d<\/em> (corect: se t\u00e2rau) = \u201en\u0103p\u0103diser\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 14), \u201eSchlauch\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: tub) = \u201e\u0163eav\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 14), \u201eStoppeln\u201d<\/em> (corect: fire scurte, tuleie) = \u201esmocuri\u201d<\/em> (p. 16), \u201egestampftvoll\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u00eendesat, burdu\u015fit) = \u201eplin cu v\u00e2rf\u201d<\/em> (p. 17), \u201eStiel\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: codi\u0163\u0103) = \u201etulpin\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 17), \u201eBank\u201d<\/em> (corect: banc\u0103) = \u201epiatr\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 19), \u201eh\u00f6ren nicht zu\u201d<\/em> (corect: nu ascult\u0103) = \u201enu aud ce se spune\u201d<\/em> (p. 20), \u201ewenn ein Auge quillt\u201d<\/em> (corect: c\u00e2nd se umfl\u0103 un ochi) = \u201ec\u00e2nd \u00ee\u0163i curge un ochi\u201d<\/em> (p. 21), \u201erostfrei\u201d<\/em> (corect: inoxidabil) = \u201eneruginit\u201d<\/em> (p. 21), \u201esummt\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: vuie\u015fte) = \u201eduduie\u201d<\/em> (p. 21), \u201eWaden\u201d<\/em> (corect: pulpe) = \u201ecoapse\u201d<\/em> (p. 24), \u201estreifen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: a atinge) = \u201ea m\u00e2ng\u00e2ia\u201d<\/em> (p. 27) \u201esch\u00fcrfen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: a r\u00e2c\u00e2i) = \u201ea zg\u00e2ria\u201d<\/em> (p. 27), \u201eschwimmen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: plutesc) = \u201e\u00eenoat\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 31), \u201ees gluckst\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: g\u00e2lg\u00e2ie) = \u201esughite\u201d<\/em> (p. 33), \u201eGaumen\u201d<\/em> (corect: cerul gurii) = \u201edeget\u201d<\/em> (p. 34), \u201egrobgerippt\u201d<\/em> (corect: cu nervuri grosiere) = \u201e\u00eencre\u0163ite grosolan\u201d<\/em> (p. 37), \u201eman wird hellh\u00f6rig\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u0163i se ascut urechile) =: \u201e\u00eencepi s\u0103 ai auzul limpede\u201d<\/em> (p. 37), \u201emit den H\u00e4nden voraus\u201d<\/em> (literal: cu m\u00e2inile \u00eenainte, aici probabil: f\u0103r\u0103 z\u0103bav\u0103) = \u201es\u0103 \u00eentind\u0103 m\u00e2inile\u201d<\/em> (. 38), \u201er\u00fcttelt am Stuhl\u201d<\/em> (corect: zg\u00e2l\u0163\u00e2ie scaunul) = \u201ese leag\u0103n\u0103 cu scaunul\u201d<\/em> (p. 38), \u201eliegengelassenen Jahren\u201d<\/em> (foarte probabil corect: anii trecu\u0163i) = \u201eanii de izbeli\u015fte\u201d<\/em> (p. 40), \u201emacht Pfuscherei\u201d<\/em> (corect: face lucru de m\u00e2ntuial\u0103) = \u201ese \u0163ine de prostii\u201d<\/em> (p. 41), \u201eGras\u201d<\/em> (corect: iarba) = \u201eburuiana\u201d<\/em> (p. 43), \u201eClematis\u201d<\/em> (corect: clematis) = \u201ezorele\u201d<\/em> (p. 44) \u201egingen eine Spanne weit \u00fcber ihren Schatten hinaus\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u00ee\u015fi dep\u0103\u015feau \u00een mare m\u0103sur\u0103 posibilit\u0103\u0163ile proprii) = \u201emergeau o bucat\u0103 de drum dep\u0103\u015findu-\u015fi cu mult umbra\u201d<\/em> (p.44), \u201evor der Kerze sieht man das nicht\u201d<\/em> (corect: la lum\u00e2nare nu vezi asta) = \u201easta nu se vede din cauza lum\u00e2n\u0103rii\u201d<\/em> (p. 48), \u201eer macht die K\u00f6pfe stur\u201d<\/em> (corect: le face capetele \u00eend\u0103r\u0103tnice) = \u201ele face capetele p\u0103trate\u201d<\/em> (p. 48), \u201eWeizenstoppeln\u201d<\/em> (corect: miri\u015fte, tulei de gr\u00e2u) = \u201elanuri de gr\u00e2u\u201d<\/em> (p. 49), \u201eKehlkopf\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: m\u0103rul lui Adam) = \u201eberegata\u201d<\/em> (p. 49), \u201eHirschgras\u201d<\/em> (corect: pir) = \u201eciulin\u201d<\/em> (p. 50), \u201eblasen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: a sufla) = \u201ea arunca\u201d<\/em> (p. 53), \u201eals h\u00e4tte sich [ ] die Weide durchgebissen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: ca \u015fi cum [ ] p\u0103\u015funea ar fi ie\u015fit la iveal\u0103) = \u201ede parc\u0103 [ ] p\u0103\u015funea s-ar fi sf\u00e2\u015fiat\u201d<\/em> (p. 54), \u201evor dem einzelnen Haus\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u00een fa\u0163a casei singuratice) = \u201e\u00een fa\u0163a singurei case\u201d<\/em> (p. 64), \u201eWarzen<\/em>\u201d (corect: negi) = \u201eco\u015furi\u201d<\/em> (p. 64), \u201eMaschinen\u00f6l\u201d<\/em> (corect: ulei lubrifiant) = \u201emotorin\u0103\u201c<\/em> (p. 77), \u201eFleckensalz\u201d<\/em> (corect: detergent de pete) = \u201epiatra acr\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 77), \u201eRinnstein\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: rigol\u0103, cloac\u0103) = \u201ebolovan\u201d<\/em> (p. 78), \u201e\u00dcberdru\u00df\u201d<\/em> (corect: plictis, ur\u00e2t) = \u201erepulsie\u201d<\/em> (p. 78), \u201eHirschgras\u201d<\/em> (corect: pir) = \u201ezmeoaic\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 80), \u201eRasseln\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: r\u0103p\u0103ie, zuruie) = \u201ez\u0103ng\u0103nesc\u201d<\/em> (p. 86), \u201egerinnt<\/em> nicht\u201d<\/em> (corect: nu se \u00eencheag\u0103) = \u201enu curge\u201d<\/em> (p. 93), \u201eBaumschule\u201d<\/em> (corect: pepinier\u0103) = \u201e\u015fcoal\u0103 de copaci\u201d<\/em> (p. 101), \u201eFeldstecher\u201d<\/em> (corect: binoclu) = \u201ebinoclu de c\u00e2mp\u201d<\/em> (p. 101), \u201eTrippeln\u201d<\/em> (corect: trop\u0103ie) = \u201edau din picioare\u201d<\/em> (p. 117), \u201eFettauge\u201d<\/em> (corect: stelu\u0163\u0103 de gr\u0103sime) = \u201ecercul de sup\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 118), \u201eWagen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: ma\u015fin\u0103) = \u201ecamion\u201d<\/em> (p. 120), \u201eWas meinst du\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: ce vrei s\u0103 spui) = \u201ece crezi\u201d<\/em> (p. 130), \u201eder streunende Hunger\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: <\/em>foamea de pripas) = \u201efoamea care \u00eempr\u0103\u015ftie\u201d (p. 146), <\/em>\u201eman k\u00f6nnte das Fenster aufrei\u00dfen\u201d (corect: ai putea deschide fereastra) = \u201eam putea deschide brusc fereastra\u201d<\/em> (p. 183), \u201enichts mehr vom Wohnen wei\u00df\u201d<\/em> (corect: nu mai \u015ftie nimic de a locui) = \u201enu mai \u015ftie nimic despre faptul c\u0103 locuie\u015fte acolo\u201d<\/em> (p. 184), \u201eDiesel\u00f6l\u201d<\/em> (corect: motorin\u0103) = \u201eulei Diesel\u201d<\/em> (p. 205).<\/span><\/p>\n

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\u00cen traducerea lui Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian \u201eLeag\u0103nul respira\u0163iei\u201d<\/em> (eu a\u015f fi scris mai degrab\u0103 \u201eLeag\u0103nul sufl\u0103rii\u201d<\/em>), erorile grave de traducere sunt ceva mai rare, dar nu inexistente. De remarcat este \u00eens\u0103 faptul c\u0103 textul german al acestei c\u0103r\u0163i, care se bazeaz\u0103 \u00een mare parte pe \u00eensemn\u0103rile lui Oskar Pastior \u015fi \u00eencearc\u0103 s\u0103 vad\u0103 lumea prin ochii acestuia, este mult mai u\u015for de tradus dec\u00e2t majoritatea celorlalte c\u0103r\u0163i ale acelea\u015fi autoare. Limbajul, chiar dac\u0103 are pe alocuri puternice accente lirice, este unul \u00een cea mai mare parte uzual, cu pu\u0163ine ambiguit\u0103\u0163i \u015fi sincope stilistice.<\/span><\/p>\n

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G\u0103sim totu\u015fi \u015fi aici pasaje mai greu de tradus. Propozi\u0163ia<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eMan taxiert beim anderen das Schlitzmaul\u201d <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00eenseamn\u0103 pe rom\u00e2ne\u015fte aproximativ:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eExaminezi(scrutezi) la cel\u0103lalt gura ca o t\u0103ietur\u0103\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u015fi induce o formulare greoaie.<\/span><\/p>\n

Versiunea lui Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian ne induce \u00eens\u0103 \u00een eroare:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00cel taxezi pe cel\u0103lalt dup\u0103 botu-n dung\u0103\u201d (p. 118)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

pentru c\u0103 \u201eSchlitz\u201d<\/em> nu este \u201edung\u0103\u201d<\/em> \u015fi \u201eMaul\u201d<\/em> nu este \u201ebot\u201d.<\/em> Cititorului rom\u00e2n, aceasta \u00eei sugereaz\u0103 mai degrab\u0103 un bot str\u00e2mb.<\/span><\/p>\n

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O situa\u0163ie asem\u0103n\u0103toare avem \u015fi aici, deoarece asocierea fonetic\u0103 nu exist\u0103 dec\u00e2t \u00een german\u0103:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eHasoweh. Das klingt wie verwundeter Hase\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

care \u00eenseamn\u0103 \u00een traducere corect\u0103<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eHasoweh. Sun\u0103 ca iepure r\u0103nit\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u015fi este, f\u0103r\u0103 o explica\u0163ie la subsol \u2013 la fel ca \u015fi \u00een orice alt\u0103 limb\u0103 \u00een afar\u0103 de german\u0103 \u2013de ne\u00een\u0163eles.<\/span><\/p>\n

\u00cencercarea:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eHasoweh. Sun\u0103 ca \u015fi cum ai spune: Iepure, vai \u0163ie!\u201d (p. 121)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

nu poate, bine\u00een\u0163eles, nici ea s\u0103 rezolve aceast\u0103 problem\u0103 \u015fi se \u00eendep\u0103rteaz\u0103 \u00een mod inutil de original.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Vom g\u0103si \u00eens\u0103 \u00een aceast\u0103 carte inexactit\u0103\u0163i chiar \u015fi \u00een cazuri \u00een care dificult\u0103\u0163ile textului nu justific\u0103 aceasta.<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eDas Lied schwappte einem im Kopf und passte sich ans Fahren an\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00eenseamn\u0103 pe rom\u00e2ne\u015fte:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eC\u00e2ntecul \u0163i se cl\u0103tina (zb\u0103tea) \u00een cap, potrivindu-se la(cu) mersul (trenului) [ ]\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

sau<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eC\u00e2ntecul \u00ee\u0163i plesc\u0103ia \u00een cap, potrivindu-se cu mersul (trenului) [ ]\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

pe c\u00e2nd versiunea lui Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian \u00eenlocuie\u015fte f\u0103r\u0103 nici un motiv dinamicul \u201eschwappen\u201d<\/em> prin staticul \u201ea b\u0103lti\u201d<\/em>:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eC\u00e2ntecul \u00ee\u0163i b\u0103ltea \u00een creier, insinu\u00eendu-se \u00een mersul trenului [ ] \u201d (p. 16).<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Traducerea atent\u0103 a textului<\/span><\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eDass ich im Kopf dieselbe F\u00e4hrte trug, als Eingeweihter die Erregung in verrutschten Kleidern kannte, die streunende Lust und ihr schnappendes Gl\u00fcck [ ]\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u015fi anume:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eC\u0103 purtam \u00een cap aceea\u015fi potec\u0103, cuno\u015fteam ca un ini\u0163iat a\u0163\u00e2\u0163area din hainele r\u0103v\u0103\u015fite, pl\u0103cerea r\u0103t\u0103citoare \u015fi fericirea pe apucate [ ]\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

este un rezultat mult mai simplu \u015fi mai potrivit dec\u00e2t formularea greoaie \u015fi inexact\u0103<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u015ei nici c\u0103 mi se \u00eentip\u0103rise \u00een creier una \u015fi aceea\u015fi c\u0103rare sau c\u0103 eram deja ini\u0163iat \u00een excita\u0163ia de sub hainele r\u0103v\u0103\u015fite, la fel ca \u015fi \u00een volupt\u0103\u0163ile r\u0103t\u0103citoare \u015fi \u00een fericirea lor care \u00ee\u0163i t\u0103ia r\u0103suflarea [ ]\u201d (p. 94) <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Aceala\u015fi lucru este valabil \u015fi \u00een urm\u0103torul caz<\/span><\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] doch mit der Planton Kati gab er sich nur die Bl\u00f6\u00dfe der Grobheit\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

unde putem s\u0103 alegem \u00eentre alternativele:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] dar cu Planton Kati nu-\u015fi ar\u0103ta dec\u00e2t sl\u0103biciunea brutalit\u0103\u0163ii\u201d <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u015fi<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ] dar cu Planton Kati se compromitea doar prin brutalitate\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

ambele mult mai nimerite dec\u00e2t<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eDar cu ea nu f\u0103cea dec\u00e2t s\u0103-\u015fi dezv\u0103luie punctul vulnerabil al brutalit\u0103\u0163ii\u201d (p. 101).<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Afirma\u0163ia<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eVor dem Tausch kommt ein schleudernder Moment ins Hirn, und nach dem Tausch sofort ein zweifelnder.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

nu se las\u0103 transpus\u0103 \u00een rom\u00e2n\u0103 f\u0103r\u0103 interpretare:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00cenainte de schimb apare \u00een creier imboldul de a arunca(lep\u0103da, te sc\u0103pa cu orice pre\u0163), iar dup\u0103 schimb imediat \u00eendoiala.\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

pentru c\u0103 \u00eencercarea de a traduce literal a lui Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00cenainte de a face schimbul, \u00een creierul meu se produce un moment centrifugal, \u015fi imediat dup\u0103 aceea, unul dubitativ\u201d (p. 117)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

poate doar s\u0103 dezorienteze cititorul.<\/span><\/p>\n

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La polul diametral opus g\u0103sim exemplul<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e[ ]in der Brust die taktversessene Pumpe [ ]\u201d: <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

care se traduce corect prin:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201e\u00een piept pompa obsedat\u0103 de(ahtiat\u0103 dup\u0103) ritm [ ]\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00een timp ce Alexandru Al. \u015eahighian apeleaz\u0103 la o interpretare inexact\u0103 \u015fi f\u0103r\u0103 rost:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201ePompa din piept b\u0103t\u00e2nd frenetic\u201d (p. 238) <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Un alt aspect m-a deranjat la aceast\u0103 traducere la fel de mult ca \u015fi inexactit\u0103\u0163ile amintite, \u015fi anume folosirea excesiv\u0103 a unor cuvinte \u015fi expresii exagerate, neao\u015fe, de r\u0103sp\u00e2ndire regional\u0103 sau chiar argotice, a c\u0103ror alegere nu este prin nimic justificat\u0103 de textul original.<\/span><\/span><\/p>\n

Propozi\u0163ia<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eEs wurde mit weit aufgerissenen Augen leise und viel gesprochen und mit zugedr\u00fcckten Augen leise und viel geweint. \u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

se poate traduce \u201ecuminte\u201d<\/span><\/span><\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eCu ochii larg deschi\u015fi se vorbea \u00eencet(i\u015for) \u015fi mult \u015fi cu ochii \u00eenchi\u015fi se pl\u00e2ngea \u00eencet(i\u015for) \u015fi mult\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u015fi sun\u0103 mai bine dec\u00e2t:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eCu ochii bulbuca\u0163i oamenii vorbeau \u00eenceti\u015for \u015fi mult, iar cu ochii str\u00e2ns \u00eenchi\u015fi pl\u00e2ngeau \u00eenceti\u015for \u015fi mult.\u201d (p. 12)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Aceea\u015fi impresie o c\u00e2\u015ftig\u0103m \u015fi la urm\u0103torul exemplu:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eVon einem Baum kann man nicht angeschrien und nicht verpr\u00fcgelt werden\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

adic\u0103:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eUn pom nu strig\u0103 la tine \u015fi nu te ciom\u0103ge\u015fte\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

care sun\u0103 mult mai bine dec\u00e2t:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eUn pom nu zbiar\u0103 la tine \u015fi nici nu-\u0163i arde o mam\u0103 de b\u0103taie\u201d (p. 57)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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Acela\u015fi lucru \u015fi aici:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eDer Frost dr\u00fcckte ihnen die Augen zu\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

unde traducerea f\u0103r\u0103 \u00eenflorituri<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eGerul le \u00eenchidea ochii\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

este preferabil\u0103 formei populare<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eGerul le zg\u00e2rcea ochii\u201d (p. 69).<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

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\u015ei mai clar:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eDie Suppe war hei\u00df, ich schl\u00fcrfte und schielte zu ihr\u201d <\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00eenseamn\u0103 tradus <\/span>\u201ecuminte\u201d:<\/span><\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eSupa era fierbinte, sorbeam \u015fi tr\u0103geam cu ochiul la ea\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00een timp ce op\u0163iunea<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eSupa era fierbinte, o leorp\u0103iam \u015fi tr\u0103geam cu coada ochiului la ea\u201d (p. 75)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

sun\u0103 exagerat popular-neao\u015f.<\/span><\/p>\n

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\u00cen propozi\u0163ia:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eLachte hohl, wie Truth\u00e4hne bellen\u201d<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

care tradus\u0103 literal \u00eenseamn\u0103:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eR\u00e2se cavernos(a gol), cum latr\u0103 curcanii\u201d,<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

autoarea folose\u015fte pentru descrierea zgomotului f\u0103cut de curcani verbul impropriu \u201ebellen\u201d<\/em>. Dac\u0103 folosirea cuv\u00e2ntului onomatopeic uzual \u201eGluckern\u201d este evitat\u0103 (ceea ce se \u00eent\u00e2mpl\u0103 des la Herta M\u00fcller), aceasta are loc cu bun\u0103 inten\u0163ie \u015fi trebuie, dup\u0103 mine, respectat\u0103.<\/span><\/p>\n

Op\u0163iunea:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eR\u00e2se cavernos, cum leorb\u0103ie curcanii mari\u201d (p. 102)<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

o g\u0103sesc indiscutabil\u0103, pentru c\u0103 folose\u015fte un cuv\u00e2nt cu r\u0103sp\u00e2ndire regional\u0103 \u015fi sonoritate exagerat popular\u0103, care nici m\u0103car nu se bucur\u0103 de avantajul exactit\u0103\u0163ii.<\/span><\/p>\n

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Pe aceea\u015fi linie se axeaz\u0103 \u015fi urm\u0103toarele exemple: <\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eBetrug\u201d<\/span><\/em> (corect: \u00een\u015fel\u0103torie) = \u201ecacealma\u201d<\/em> (p. 32), \u201eBrottuch\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u015ftergar de p\u00e2ine) = \u201es\u0103cotei cu p\u00e2ine\u201d<\/em> (p. 78), \u201eMachwerk\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: lucr\u0103tur\u0103) = \u201eC\u00e2rp\u0103ceal\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 84), \u201eGlutst\u00fcckchen\u201d<\/em> (corect: buc\u0103\u0163ele de jar) = \u201ef\u0103r\u00e2mele de j\u0103r\u0103gai\u201d<\/em> (p. 168), \u201emit den Schn\u00e4beln quitschten\u201d<\/em> (corect: sc\u00e2r\u0163\u00e2iau din ciocuri) = \u201ecr\u00e2\u015fneau din ciocuri\u201d<\/em> (p. 219), \u201ea\u00df\u201d<\/em> (corect: m\u00e2nca) = \u201eh\u0103p\u0103ia\u201d <\/em>(p. 228), \u201eBlut der zerquetschten Wanzen\u201d<\/em> (corect: s\u00e2ngele plo\u015fni\u0163elor strivite) = \u201es\u00e2ngele plo\u015fni\u0163elor storcite\u201d<\/em> (p. 229), \u201eau\u00dfer dem ewig sirrenden Leierkasten\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u00een afar\u0103 de fla\u015fneta care zumz\u0103ie ve\u015fnic) = \u201e\u00een afara z\u00e2z\u00e2itului ve\u015fnic al caterincii\u201d<\/em> (p. 240), \u201ebis er zerrissen war\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: p\u00e2n\u0103 s-a destr\u0103mat) = \u201eh\u0103rt\u0103nindu-se\u201d<\/em> (p. 268), \u201edas man noch klopfen musste\u201d<\/em> (corect: care trebuia s-o mai sf\u0103r\u00e2mi) = \u201etrebuia abia s-o mai zdro\u015fe\u015fti\u201d<\/em> (p. 275), \u201emeine zugemaulten Angstw\u00fcnsche\u201d<\/em> (corect: reprobatele mele dorin\u0163e de spaim\u0103,) = \u201edorin\u0163ele mele de spaim\u0103, \u00eembon\u0163ate\u201d<\/em> (p. 284).<\/span><\/p>\n

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Vom reg\u0103si \u00eens\u0103 \u00een aceast\u0103 carte \u015fi contrariul acestei tendin\u0163e, adic\u0103 folosirea f\u0103r\u0103 rost \u015fi adesea improprie a unor neologisme, lucru pentru mine nu mai pu\u0163in deranjant. C\u00e2teva exemple:<\/span><\/p>\n

\u201eSchreckensgekn\u00f6ch\u201d<\/span><\/em> (corect: ciolane de groaz\u0103) = \u201eCarcas\u0103 sinistr\u0103\u201d<\/em> (p. 17), \u201eVerwahrlosung\u201d<\/em> (corect: del\u0103sare) = \u201edecrepitudine\u201d<\/em> (p. 43), \u201eauf den Zehenspitzen\u201d<\/em> (corect: \u00een v\u00e2rful picioarelor) = \u201epe poante\u201d<\/em> (p. 116), \u201eGrasnarbe\u201d <\/em>(corect: glie) = \u201ecicatricea ierbii\u201d<\/em> (p. 126), \u201eAusma\u00df\u201d<\/em> (corect: m\u0103rime) = \u201egabarit\u201d<\/em> (p. 155), \u201eWegen den ganzen Entfernungen\u201d<\/em> (corect aici: Din cauza tuturor dep\u0103rt\u0103rilor) = \u201eDin cauza distan\u0163elor formidabile\u201c<\/em> (p. 195)<\/span><\/p>\n

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*Verbul rom\u00e2nesc \u201ea traduce\u201d<\/em> are \u015fi \u00een\u0163elesul figurat (\u00een prezent mai pu\u0163in cunoscut) de \u201ea \u00een\u015fela partenerul \u00een dragoste\u201d.<\/em><\/span><\/p>\n

Versiunea \u00een limba german\u0103 vezi aici<\/a>.
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